A new RPG(as in each person makes posts about his/her char so its not a 1 char story

No seriously... it has been done in offtopic

There have been several &quot;add-on&quot; stories in off topic. . <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Michael <A href=´http://messianicgentile.tripod.com´ Target=_Blank> Song of Solomon </a>

This is the biggest of all. <A href=´http://www.lancersreactor.org/t/forum/topic.asp?topic_id=21932&amp;forum_id=12&amp;Topic_Title=The+Lancersreactor+Webstory+techy+bits&amp;forum_title=Off+Topic&amp;cat_title=Other&amp;M=False´ Target=_Blank>Link</a> there are other, they have just dropped way down as a lot get locked over time.

WOULD A ADMIN PLZ COME DELETE ALL THESE USELESS POSTS THESE PPL ARE MAKING SO IT DOES NOT POLLUTE MY THREAD THANKYOU.(and yes i know about the caps rule but in my current mood i dont really fricking care cause i DOESNT MATTER WHERE I MAKE FANFICTION ITS ON TOPIC SO LEAVE IT ALONE IM NOT TALIKNG ABUOT A KOOL CAR OR A B-DAY ITS JUST PLAIN FAN-FIC/RPG WATEVER U WANT TO CALL IT) Edited by - Dragonborn on 6/10/2004 6:41:08 PM

Would the above poster please shut up. We aren´t caring.

Wow, a n00b who thinks he can &quot;boss&quot; around the moderators .... I´m going to watch this thread, and laugh when he gets what´s coming to him ... <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>

Alright, knock it off guys! <img src=smilies/icon_smile_angry.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Dragonborn hasn´t done anything wrong by making a thread about a new FL based RPG. No need to go tell him it´s Off Topic, since it´s FL based and besides, it´s nice to have FL stories. Yes we did do stories in Off Topic, but that doesn´t mean this one needs to go to Off Topic as well or that he has to add to exsisting stories, because all he want is to start a new one. Let´s give him a chance shall we. I´m keeping this open for people to add to, but don´t let me catch any of you making hateful remarks, spam etc., otherwise I might delete your posts! dragonborn : As you can see I´m giving you a chance, but let me make it very clear I´m not particular happy with the way you´re loosing your temper here and your attitude. Don´t go telling us what to do, especially not in CAPS! I advise you to not do that again, or else I´ll just lock or delete this entire thing the next time without hesitating or worse. PS. I might delete some of the posts in here in a short while to not let it cloud a potential story. I´ll watch this one closely to see how it goes....if it´s not going to work out, I´ll lock it after all. Eraser Moderator for <A href=´http://www.lancersreactor.org´ Target=_Blank>The Lancers Reactor</a> Creator of the <A href=´http://lancersreactor.spymac.net/´ Target=_Blank>TLR FTP Upload Service</a> E-Mail: eraser@lancersreactor.org MSN: get_erased@hotmail.com <img src=´http://www.lancersreactor.org/t/i/lan_butt.gif ´> Edited by - Eraser on 6/11/2004 4:07:08 AM

good ol´ Wouter, what a nice bloke <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>

thnx for the second chance they were just annoying and i lost my temper(i think it runs in the family)i know about the caps rule i was really pissed off and i am very sorry about it becasue i know its annoying to ppl. sooooo, anyone wanna add on to the story(note: criticism is accepted and will be used if possible such as not enough depth more detail bigger fights etc. im not hard headed or hard to ge along with and to the earlier comment no i am not a n00b as you put did u even check my joining date i may not have played for ´ages´ as many of you have but i have been around long enough not to be considered a n00b imvho)(oh btw if any of you still thin kim a ´n00b´ ask someone from frostworks or dragontalon mercenaries(its a rpg clan on frostworks lvl 2 mod link: http://dragontalon.proboards31.com/) tho i do not know everyone on the frostworks forum(frost-works.com/forum) there are a quite a few that probably monitor frostwokrs and tlr forums(note to admins and mods is it even possible to make a rpg forum because it could imvho it would be easier on where to put stuff like stories or bar threads (tho i havent seen any of the latter here at tlr just my very humble opinion on the matter)(note: if no one posts it will become a story that i make not a rpg and i will add on to it when i get the time) Edited by - Dragonborn on 6/11/2004 11:26:12 AM (note: i also said plz i didn´t order him to i ´requested´ for the uselesss posts to be removed(albeit in caps which i shouldn´t have done and was a very stupid thing to do that i regret greatly and will not do in the future to the best of my ability.thnx again for the second chance eraser) Edited by - Dragonborn on 6/11/2004 11:34:55 AM

ooc Hmm another RPG is not a bad idea, depends on how it is done, if it will be anything like the first one it would be fun. Not a bad start btw, but it gets confusing at some places because of some punctuation absence <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> &quot;...All idealization makes life poorer. To beautify it is to take away its character of complexity--it is to destroy it.&quot; Conrad <A href=´http://irc.lomsdal.com/index.html´ Target=_Blank>sycho_warrior</a> Edited by - sycho_warrior on 6/11/2004 11:59:05 AM

Dragon, if you are posting, look to the left of the box, you´ll see forum codes there in blue, click on that, everything you need is there

(OOC: Hey Dragonborn. Good to have you here mate <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> It´s a good start and has some potential. You might want to explain a bit on the main characters past, how he became who he is and why he´s doing what he´s doing, etc etc. Oh, and don´t mind these people, they´ve been hanging around here for to long. Keep on writing, I´ll be keeping an eye on this <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> ) ----------- <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Celbrating one year of Daftness <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Edited by - &gt; Nickless &lt; on 6/12/2004 4:26:05 AM

k thnx for the tip didn´t know about that sycho (OOC:hi nickless wanna help with it i´m not that good at this stuff but i figured if you want to get better u´ve got to practice and i might learn stuff from people who are good at it and help make the story oh ya and i´m aignoring them to the best of my ability <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> <img src=smilies/icon_smile_approve.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> (note: i deleted some of my other unimportant posts in this thread so its not too cluttered) VVVVVVVVVVVV looks like this thread wont die afterall i´ll wait a couple of hours to see if someone else posts if they dont i´ll add on to my char. Edited by - Dragonborn on 6/12/2004 4:44:51 PM

I´m hardly the guy you want tips from. I know nothing about writing. Everything I ever wrte down just apeared on the screen out of nowhere. But I found that it helps to give your char a past. Write a backgroundstory about him about where he was born, what happened to him that effected his life and ultimately turned him into what he is today. This gives you a startingpoint and alows you to &quot;become&quot; the character and write better stories. Something a lot of people here forget to do is to describe the scenery. This creates atmosphere and you can use it to help your char along, like letting him hide in the container he passed a while ago or behind a few crates on teh landing pad. On teh other hand, don´t over do it. Don´t use an entire page to describe what a tree looks like. Of course, describe his fealings. this (if done right) makes it easier to explain stuff and lets the reader &quot;connect&quot; with the char. But the best advice I can give you is to ask a real writer, not me. <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Anyway, good luck and don´t expect to get it right the first try and don´t feal bad about deleting entire chapters if they don´t feal right or don´t fit in to the story somehow. I could fill a book with the stuff I´ve deleted <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> ----------- <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Celbrating one year of Daftness <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>

OOC: i actually think this is a good idea, so im gonna add myself And i like to combine elements from various fictional stories, so dont be surprised when my Phoenix talks, shes my dæmon. IC: Location: Maldava Graveyard, Omicron Gamma The Maldava cloud was a hostile place, even for the most skilled pilots, as the radiation could render most ships crippled within moments. Thus it would be a surprise if anyone had gone far enough into the cloud to find a lone Anubis floating there, perpetually staring at the glowing gateway into the void beyond. With corsair ships scattered around, one mightv´e thought it was another derelict tomb, if it wasnt for the running lights. The pilot, one known only as Arania, was getting impatient. ´Where are they?´ he muttered, staring at the unknown jump hole. The golden bird on hs shoulder ruffled her feathers, sending a shower of red dust floating around the 0-G cockpit. He leant forward, scanning the scanner register, but there was nothing on the list apart from the hole and about 20 dead corsair fighters. ´Why arent they here?´ he muttred again, easing the ship towards the hole. ´Maybe they know you´re here´ Whispered the Phoenix, obviously distressed. He glanced at the bird, fully taking in her glowing form, and noticing the ruffled feathers. ´Ara, you can calm down´ He said soothingly to her ´There´s nothing here´ ´Then can we go?´ she asked AS a response, he tunred the ship around and flew out of the cloud. A chatter of radio conversation greeted him, as he heard the Corsair fleet organising the next shipment to the omegas to organise thier attack on Rheinland <i>We´ll have to stay on crete for a few days </i> he thought Another thought fluttered into his head, a thought not his own: <i>Just as soon as we can get away from these corsairs as soon as possible, i dont like them staring at me </i> He chucked at his dæmon´s message, remembing all too well the Corsair´s curiosity with Araminta the last time they were on a Corsair base. ´This is Order Theta one dash one, requesting permission to land´ he transmitted to the docking ring. ´Roger that´ came the robotic reply ´You have permission to land´ Deftly manuvering the fighter into the ring, he flew down to the Corsair homeworld. The Anubis autopiloted down and landed with a thump. He was quite surprised when he heard the next thing over his radio ´Order Theta One dash One, Get out of that ship, you are under arrest´ Six corsairs came into view, one holding a massive bazooka-like salamanca cannon. ´Well, good morning to you too´ He said sarcasticly, and Araminta chuckled slightly

As a real writer the Mantra comes to mind Detail Detail Detail Grammar Grammar Grammar Detail Detail Detail -~-~-~-~ There is no Silicon Heaven! But where do all the calculators go ? You could no more evade my wrath... than you could your own shadow!

heltak, unless your gonna offer criticism, advice or comments, dont post, especially with these ticket-yourself remarks. You are only a ´good´ writer if you can prove it

Major Gunter Waalbeck watched omni-present night sky of New Berlin anxiously. After all, it wasn´t often that you were shown your nation´s biggest secret. He heard clattering boots on the tarmac. The commodore walked briskly towards him, rubbing his hands in anticipation? Or because it was so cold? Waalbeck didn´t know, he was too excited to think. The commodore signaled to him and Waalbeck moved off towards his ship and began pre-flight checks. &quot;Major Waalbeck, please follow me immediatly, stay close&quot; snapped the Commodore over the com-link. Slowly, Waalbeck´s Valkrye lifted off the ground and moved gracefully into the inky black sky. --Six hours later-- Soon after leaving, the two man flight had cloaked and sped towards the Frankfurt system in silence. Waalbeck wasn´t really familiar with this system, for some reason it gave him a bad feeling...maybe because just one more system forward marked the centre of the Crow Nebula, and the site of the worst ever defeat of the Rheinland Imperial Navy by the hands of guerilla GMG forces. He shook these defeatist thoughts from his head and concentrated further. Their invisible flight took them to a large, odd brown nebula to the left of Planet Holstein. They disappeared within...no one noticed, the traders going on with their daily business. Suddenly they came to a strange clearing in the nebula, it was still misty but the clouds seemed to have been cleared away...as if in preparation for a base... to reveal a huge minefield..the commodore took him through a very, very tight path and Waalbeck had some very close encouters with the spiky devils. Evenually they made it to a clear zone. The commodore´s voiced snapped back on to the comm-link, though it wasnt directed at Waalbeck. &quot;Sunray minor, Sunray minor this is Iron Hammer code force three.&quot; Waalbeck raised an eyebrow...who was he talking too? Suddenly there was a flash and in front of him was a Rheinland Cruiser, with several flights of Valkryes uncloaking all at once. Then a red and blue flash and a jumphole appeared. The commodore seemed slightly pleased. &quot;Major you are about to see what very few have for the past 200 years&quot; Waalbeck tried to reply but the commodore silenced him and they moved into the jumphole. There was the predictable blue flash, but then.... Major Gunter Waalbeck sat back in his set, eyes wide, mouth openening and closing and his breath rushed out of him. &quot;Welcome to the Colditz system Major, and to the real Rheinland Military&quot; said the commodore who was smiling broadly. The system was a swirl of orange and green, the Walker Nebula and Edge Nebula surrounded them. To his left was a massive shipyard, with 16 holding positions...all filled with new Battleships. A large orange sun glared down from above them, reflecting on several Cruisers, flanked by gunboats and Valkryes as they passed the two by. A large red planet sat squat in the middle of the system and military craft flocked around that as well. The system was filled with a patchwork of shipyards, military bases, weapons platforms but most amazingly of all, Battleships. Waalbeck counted 6 and there must of been about 20 crusiers and countless numbers of Gunships and Valkryes milling about the place. &quot;Are you ready?&quot; said the commodore politely over the comm-link. &quot;Ready for what?&quot; asked Waalbeck. Your initiation as part of the new glorius Rheinland Imperial Navy. &quot;Yes Commodore&quot; replied Waalbeck boldly as they moved towards the red planet which had been christened the Wolfschanze (Wolf´s Lair) after some hiding place of an ancient obscure German leader. As they descended through the atmosphere towards the various military bases on the surface Waalbeck could see lines of powerfully built soldiers in green fatigues marching, training and partaking in assualt exercises. Gunboats and Valkryes skillfully dodged huge rock formations and flew thorugh valleys blasting targets with their Flamecurses. Waalbeck shook his head in disbeleif...This was the Rheinland Military, the one he´d always dreamed of. The most powerful force in the Sirius and a force worthy of restoring Rheinland´s damaged pride. One question still remained in his head. &quot;Commodore, no disrespect meant to our glorius nation, but in it´s damaged economy how could we afford this wonderful gift?&quot; He laughed. &quot;Surely Major you couldn´t think that a nation could stay just above bankrupt for over 200 years? We would be very rich traders if we hadn´t repaired our defence forces but I think this is a much more worthy cause to spend money towards, wouldn´t you agree?&quot; &quot;Yes commodore, and so glad I am that we did choose this course of action.&quot; The commodore nodded in approval. &quot;Yes, you are a model soldier..in words of course, your skills in the field have yet to be proven but you will learn much here.&quot; As they landed Waalbeck sat back in his set contemplating his future. Rheinland really did need a good army. The colonies were at the brink of war and Rheinland was thought to be an easy target by the other colonies. Well he thought, we will see who´s an easy target... To be continued

When the doors of the hangar bay where his fighter was stored opened the site chilled his blood, there surrounding his ship were 15 dagger´s and 3 stiletto´s all aiming at his one of a kind fighter. he had built it himself he had come across the blueprints for it and its weaponry while hacking into the liberty´s database it´s design was radical, 4 engines one atop the other on each side of the cockpit with a wing in between and below the bottom engines, on the back behind the tail it sloped down into a ovalish tail end back here there was a design for a jump drive that had not yet been developed, so instead he increased the size of the reactor so that it´s output was more than 3 titan class generators, for the weapons used on it would need the extra power to operate at peak efficiency. But even the most advanced armor and shields would not save his ship from the force in front of him that prepared to blast his ship into oblivion for without its shields it would desintigrate under the barrage of destructive energy. he quickly pulled out his remote control that could give him limited control over the systems he activated the shields, and ran towards his ship telling it to open the tinted glass canopy which with a whine of hydraulic systems did so, he leaped for it as the outcasts began to fire at his fighter he quickly punched another button on the remote control telling it to ´eliminate´ any threat to it or its pilot suddenly it opened fire on the outcasts firing from its cannons which were codenamed ´Azure Fire´ for some reason. the outcasts stunned tried to flee but the hangar bay was closed and if they fired on it the zoners would retaliate he took manual control of his fighter and then requested to leave. &quot;Freeport Four this is Omicron Black 9 requesting to launch&quot; &quot;Aknoledged Omicron Black 9 you are cleared for launch&quot; <i>what i[s up with that first the man in the bar and now thesed outcasts waiting by my ship ready to blow it to smithereens usually if they saw my fighter here they would turn tail and run like a bear was after them </i> He set his course for the old magellan to newyork jumpgate activating his advanced cruise and telling his neural net to alert him when he got near the jumpgate or hostiles were detected.It was not like him to run but his ship had one terrible weakness its shields may have been advanced for its class but a couple of fully armed sabres could still take him down easily.He sat back and relaxed, little did he know this would be the only time he would be able to relax for awhile... Edited by - Dragonborn on 6/14/2004 9:23:23 AM