My First Fan Fiction Story

    Excellent story! Indeed you should write another story. But with more talking and action. This was a great prelude. The next chapter should be longer. I did find an error though. When you said: The docking gates slowly opened, and he drifted out, then headed for the Jump Hole for the Leeds system. He had a cargo hold full of Optronics, and was going to Cambridge to sell them for a huge profit. “Freelancer Alpha One Dash Eight, this is Birmingham Station. You are cleared to launch. Good flying.” “Acknowledged, Birmingham Station, proceeding to launch.” Frosty launched from the station, setting a course for the nearby Trade Lane, going to the New London system Jump Gate. You said he launched twice. Once: The docking gates slowly opened, and he drifted out... twice: “Acknowledged, Birmingham Station, proceeding to launch.” Frosty launched from the station... a couple grammer errors, but over all, this is a GREAT story. Good luck with the rest. <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>

    He said it twice because it was two different people. First it was the station saying you can launch, and second Frosty saying he was launching. Great Story! I like the character history. Makes for a good beginning. Keep going on this one! Please! &quot;One is never too old to be student of the enemy.&quot; -Mazer Rackham-

    One is never too old to be student of the enemy. -Mazer Rackham-

    I´ll try. I´ve been kinda busy recently, with schoolwork, so I haven´t had that much spare time on my hands. Thanks for the support though! Officer! I swear to drunk I´m not God!

    Very nice had me doing my leaning into the screen to read faster trick lol. Good work. Yes I love to fly a tub <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>. Would you like to fly my titan

    Well, thanks for the support guys. I tried to plan a few stories ahead a few months back, but I got a new comp cause my computer´s hard drive got corrupted, and lost everything. Grade 9 is also very taxing, and I apologise for me not being here recently... I just haven´t had time. I just can´t envision where this story will go, so, I´ve decided to make a new one, in a different thread which I will try to update once every 2-3 weeks with a new chapter, If you like it. Officer! I swear to drunk I´m not God!