Freelancer- The Holocaust

    Um, hello? Anyone...................... echo! Good, bad, needs improvement? I want some brutally honest opinions here!

    __________________________ Okay, since someone who will remain nameless was offended by my last sentence, I`ve changed it. For those of you who just can`t wait, I`ve finally started a new fanfic, The Holocaust! __________________________ 4 8 15 16 23 42 Twenty bucks to whoever can tell me what the deal is with those numbers. I`ll give you a hint: They have somthing to do with a guy named Hurley. (Congrats to Taw, he was the first to get it right.)

    Eh, if I didn´t get it up last night then it would be three days before I would be able to post it. Besides, that was just a little teaser to draw you in.

    __________________________ Okay, since someone who will remain nameless was offended by my last sentence, I`ve changed it. For those of you who just can`t wait, I`ve finally started a new fanfic, The Holocaust! __________________________ 4 8 15 16 23 42 Twenty bucks to whoever can tell me what the deal is with those numbers. I`ll give you a hint: They have somthing to do with a guy named Hurley. (Congrats to Taw, he was the first to get it right.)

    Oh, and I just edited the last part of the teaser.

    __________________________ Okay, since someone who will remain nameless was offended by my last sentence, I`ve changed it. For those of you who just can`t wait, I`ve finally started a new fanfic, The Holocaust! __________________________ 4 8 15 16 23 42 Twenty bucks to whoever can tell me what the deal is with those numbers. I`ll give you a hint: They have somthing to do with a guy named Hurley. (Congrats to Taw, he was the first to get it right.)

    If I keep editing the last few sentences of the teaser then I won´t have any time to write the first chapter.

    __________________________ Okay, since someone who will remain nameless was offended by my last sentence, I`ve changed it. For those of you who just can`t wait, I`ve finally started a new fanfic, The Holocaust! __________________________ 4 8 15 16 23 42 Twenty bucks to whoever can tell me what the deal is with those numbers. I`ll give you a hint: They have somthing to do with a guy named Hurley. (Congrats to Taw, he was the first to get it right.)

    Whoa, wait a second. Are my eyes decieving me? Wilde is COMPLIMENTING a fanfic? THE WORLD IS COMING TO AN END!!! <img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Anyways, Killa, it´s very nice. <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>

    ________________________________ A turbulent time where the fate of humankind rests in the balance. The fulcrum, the breaking point of humanity. Heros rise and fall, faster than any can track. Saviors and demons both. Who will you be? How will your story be told? Control Your Own Faction 5: The Redemption Join the revolution here!

    Keep your pants on, Killa. <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> It´s a good intro. <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>

    Mmm Mmm good. I´m intrigued. ´Turd-lickin´ dick´? That´s gold! And go easy on Wilde. He´s an honest critic. Edited by - neuromancer on 10/3/2005 1:50:04 PM

    Aah yes, but remember guys, I did ask you to be brutally honest. And, I warn you now, Frank Johnson does have a pretty dirty mouth. There WILL be some language in this. And in case you haven´t guessed already, he is kind of a hillbilly. He is from Planet Houston in Texas and is kind of country. Well, let´s just say sort of a cowboy. He is a real smart ass (just like I am in real life) and he is a con-man. But, I´d better get back to work on chapter 1.

    __________________________ Okay, since someone who will remain nameless was offended by my last sentence, I`ve changed it. For those of you who just can`t wait, I`ve finally started a new fanfic, The Holocaust! __________________________ 4 8 15 16 23 42 Twenty bucks to whoever can tell me what the deal is with those numbers. I`ll give you a hint: They have somthing to do with a guy named Hurley. (Congrats to Taw, he was the first to get it right.)

    looks good so far, i agree, it is some what choppy, otherwise tho... and on a different note... as I love jeff foxworthy, Yoy might be a redneck if you stick redneck jokes in a fan fic for a game set in space! does writing that make me a redneckm, corse i am one anyways so....... ARGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG :-D anywho If you only learn one thing in Freelancer, let it be this, do not piss off someone who is much better, or has a much higher level than you.

    If you only learn one thing in Freelancer, let it be this, do not piss off someone who is much better, or has a much higher level than you.

    That IS NOT Jeff Foxworthy! I hate him so much! No, if I was to put any comedian in there it would be Dave Chappelle.

    __________________________ Okay, since someone who will remain nameless was offended by my last sentence, I`ve changed it. For those of you who just can`t wait, I`ve finally started a new fanfic, The Holocaust! __________________________ 4 8 15 16 23 42 Twenty bucks to whoever can tell me what the deal is with those numbers. I`ll give you a hint: They have somthing to do with a guy named Hurley. (Congrats to Taw, he was the first to get it right.)