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Thursday, September 9th 2004, 6:43pm

this is very good, cant wait till the next chapter. <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>
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Friday, September 10th 2004, 5:41pm

Dying....need more. _____________________________________________________________ <img src=´http://www.angelfire.com/rebellion2/su17/aravispic ´> Giggity Giggity Gi-Gi-Ty Oh Yeah! <img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> (I love that family guy shirt
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Saturday, September 11th 2004, 5:54pm

Ok, sorry all for the week long wait on this. Thanks Aravis and Dex for your responses<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> I do however have number 4 complete but its short. I may decide in the morning that i want to change it in places, then again, i may not. No ETA on five at the moment i´m afraid. Enjoy<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> <b>Chapter 4 &#8211; Twist Of Fate </b> The nine ships cleared the landing pad and made their way to the Sprague docking ring. Waiting in space was a Dom Kavash escort fighter and a Dom Kavash Transport. &#8220;I&#8217;m uploading the transmisson co-ordinates in to all of your neural nets now&#8221; said Omaelia. Queen Carina had sent word to the Bretonian Military and the Bretonian Police to provide protection for the convoy as it made its way through Bretonian Space to Tau-23. With the military and police escort, the 11 ship strong convoy made its way to the Tau 31 jump gate. &#8220;This is where we part ways, good luck&#8221; said the Military transport leader when the convoy arrived at Glasgow. &#8220;Ok Trent, you take point we&#8217;ll meet you on the other side&#8221; said Omaelia. Each ship proceeded to follow Trent through the jump gate in to Tau-31. &#8220;We haven&#8217;t been here in while&#8221; said Trent to Juni. Their first destination was outpost Holman, which only two and half years ago, had been the site of a Rheinland surprise attack during the first Nomad wars. &#8220;It certainly brings back a few memories&#8221; replied Juni. The convoy flew by Holman and headed for the trade lane that would take them to the recently completed Jump Gate in to Tau-23. At the Jump gate, Omaelia came over the group communications. &#8220;Ok, once we clear the gate, we are to head to Cali. There are two people waiting for us there&#8221; &#8220;Who?&#8221; asked Trent. &#8220;Friends of yours Trent. They are coming with us&#8221; The convoy made their final jump through the gate in to Tau-23. Hispania had claimed Cali after the coming together of both the Outcasts and the Corsairs. The flight through the ice field was always a treacherous one, but everyone one in the convoy was a skilled pilot and they made their way to Cali without a hitch. &#8220;Fighter Convoy, this is Cali, you are cleared for docking&#8221; Each ship proceeded to land on Cali. On the deck, was two familiar faces to Trent, Juni, Von Claussen and King. &#8220;Ah Mr Trent, Juni&#8221; said Quintaine. &#8220;Its good to see you all again&#8221; &#8220;Professor Quintaine, Dr Sinclair? What are you two doing here?&#8221; said Trent. &#8220;Whatever is out there, it&#8217;s a good possibility that it isn&#8217;t human. We are to tag along as mere advisors. We will be going in the Dom Kavash Transport to ananlysie any debris or whatever we made find&#8221; replied Sinclair Omaelia came walking over from her ship. &#8220;Trent, are you and your people ready?&#8221; she asked. &#8220;Yes&#8221; &#8220;Good. Dr Sinclair, will you and the professor please board the transport. We have no time to waste&#8221; Everyone who landed on Cali made their way back to their ships and launched in to space. Omaelia got over the communication channel. &#8220;Ok everyone, this is it. I want you all to have your weapons at the ready. I&#8217;ll take point. Engageing cruise speed.&#8221; Each ship powered up its cruise engines and headed for the transmission co-ordinates. As they began to approach the barrier, the ice fields began to clear and the emptiness of space became evident. &#8220;Ok we&#8217;re almost at the co-ordinates, be alert&#8221; said Omaelia. Each ships scanner went off as they approached the origin of the transmission. This confirmed that something was out here. &#8220;Approaching target, no visual&#8230;Hold on, I&#8217;ve got something here&#8221; said Trent. Everyone disengaged their engines. &#8220;It&#8217;s a ship!&#8221; said Juni. &#8220;Yes. But what kind?&#8221; replied Von Claussen. &#8220;I&#8217;m going to take a closer&#8221; said Trent. &#8220;Be careful&#8221; replied Juni. Trent approached the ship and ran a scan of the vessel. He couldn&#8217;t bring up a communication channel with the ship. Trent could make out Alien writing along the side of it. &#8220;Hmm, the engines are fried and it&#8217;s only got minimum power. Enough to send out a distress call&#8221; said Trent. &#8220;Ok, we&#8217;ll tractor it on to the transport and take it back to Sprague for observation. The two doctors are ready to take a look at it in the meantime&#8221; replied Omaelia. &#8220;Hold on a second, I&#8217;m picking up a life sign. It&#8217;s a very weak life sign, but something is in that ship!&#8221; said Trent. &#8220;Ok. We need this back at Sprague as quickly as possible. DK Transport, proceed with salvage&#8221; The Dom Kavash transport tractored the alien ship on board. Edited by - Bret Bretonian on 9/11/2004 4:56:33 PM
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Saturday, September 11th 2004, 5:59pm

Cheers bret i like it alot
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Sunday, September 12th 2004, 10:41am

yeah it´s good

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Sunday, September 12th 2004, 3:30pm

i thought you had left dex, haven´t seen you post in a while<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>
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Sunday, September 12th 2004, 3:34pm

WOO! Very good Bret! <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle><img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Must have more! *twitches* Keep it up, OR ELSE! <img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> ____________________________________ Some questions I have... If you throw a cat out a car window does it become kitty liter? If it´s tourist season, why can´t we shoot them? Why did kamikaze pilots wear helmets? Why do people who know the least know it the loudest? <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>
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Sunday, September 12th 2004, 10:46pm

Quality work as always. I shouldn´t need to tell you to keep it up.
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Monday, September 13th 2004, 9:35am

HAHA bret i´ll always be in your topics you rule man...........

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Monday, September 13th 2004, 7:21pm

Ahh...kick as* mate wish I could have it all at once!
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Monday, September 13th 2004, 7:59pm

sigh.. bet why do we have to wait <img src=smilies/icon_smile_tongue.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> you know we all enjoy your dtory very much and so... to be blunt MORE !!!!!!!!!
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Wednesday, September 15th 2004, 5:56am

Thanks guys for your continued support for my fanfic<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Unfortunately, i am lacking in any real ideas as to where i am taking this. Whilst it has started out exactly how i want, i can´t see any major developments. This i felt is clearly evident in Chapter 4 as i feel it could of been so much better. It lacked a lot of flair and excitement the other chapters have had. I will however just sit back and wait for the right ideas to come. So have no fear i´ll be thinking of the next chapter and how i can make this just get better and better<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle>
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Wednesday, September 15th 2004, 9:33am

<font size=1 face="trebuchet ms"><BLOCKQUOTE><hr size=1 noshade>It lacked a lot of flair and excitement the other chapters have had. <hr size=1 noshade></BLOCKQUOTE></font><font face=´trebuchet ms, Verdana, Arial, Helvetica´ size=2> [yodavoice &quot;Excitement?&quot; Heh. &quot;Flair?&quot; Heh. A fanfic writer craves not these things. [/yodavoice But seriously...don´t worry about making your works action-packed. If they´re well written (and they are, relatively speaking) you´ll find readers. Heck, I´ll bet great authors could make a recipe for white bread intersting. Edited by - CODENAME on 9/15/2004 8:35:02 AM
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Thursday, September 16th 2004, 8:06pm

Just started reading fanfiction,I like it. Good job.
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Thursday, September 16th 2004, 10:35pm

Just read,&quot;Saviours of Serius&quot;,and really enjoyed it. I might start reading stories again. Keep it up.
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Friday, September 17th 2004, 6:07am

Hey bret i don´t know if you are allready working on a new chapter... but why don´t you make that strange thing they saw a battleship of the coalition.. or maybe a sleeper ship from more aliens.... or the real hispania and that the hispania in omi alpha is a fake one that the coalittion had send..... maybe these things will give you some insiration.... o wel.. seee ya keep it up..

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Friday, September 17th 2004, 11:30am

Thanks for the idea. Ideas have been floating around dex. I´m not going to disclose anything just yet so i don´t spoil the story. I´m finding the only time i can really add more to this is the weekend. However, any ideas, as i said when i did SOS, are greatly appreciated<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Update as to what is currently happening with FL - The Return. I just got Silent Hill 4 today and its not going to leave a lot of room for story writing i´m afraid for at least a week. I do have a week off work at the end of the month and will resume my story once i complete SH4. Edited by - Bret Bretonian on 9/18/2004 8:53:45 AM
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Saturday, September 18th 2004, 6:31am

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Sunday, September 19th 2004, 1:06pm

Just take your time bret... i know it will work out... but you wont see me back here for a while so i´ll discrobe your story´s in 1 word...... PERFECT... keep it up see ya....

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Thursday, September 23rd 2004, 3:34pm

Hope your still reading this tho dex<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> Anyway guys, i have completed silent hill 4, and seeing as i have left my little baby story, i have some to restore life in to her once more. So take out your dusters, brush away the cobwebs, and enjoy chapter 5<img src=smilies/icon_smile.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> <b>Chapter 5 &#8211; Flashback </b> The flight back to Sprague through Bretonia was a safe one. Omaelia had boarded the Transport with the Alien vessel and ordered an immediate quarantine zone around the ship until they reached their destination of Sprague. &#8220;What do you think it is?&#8221; said Von Claussen over the private comms to Trent. The confusion in Trents voice was clearly apparent. &#8220;I dunno. That writing&#8230;Its&#8230;&#8221; Trent was cut off by a group communication by Aldershot Station. &#8220;Transport Convoy, this is Aldershot Station, please proceed through the Jump gate, Sprague is aware of your imminent arrival&#8221; &#8220;How rude!&#8221; said Trent. The Transport convoy made its way to the Dom Kavash docking ring. It was large enough for the transport to make its descent down to the planet. Trent, Juni, King, Von Claussen and Parkin followed shortly after, along with the rest of the convoy ships. Waiting on the landing pad was Ganesh, his two advisors, Orillion, Jacobi and Queen Carina. Everyone made their way out of their ships and waited for the alien vessel to be pulled out of the transport. Omaelia, Quintaine and Sinclair had already left the transport and had gathered around the ship with everyone else. Trent, Juni, King and Von Claussen went to stand with Orillion and Jacobi. Parkin went over to stand by Queen Carina There was much apprehension on the ground as the alien ship drifted out of the large belly of the transport. &#8220;Well, its erm, doesn&#8217;t appear very alien does it&#8221; said Jacobi. The ship appeared to be very crude, made out of materials not common to Sirius. &#8220;Doctor, can you decipher this writing&#8221; said Omaelia to Quintaine while pointing at the writing on the side of the ship <b>anr koanuuu </b> &#8220;No, its like nothing I&#8217;ve ever seen&#8221; replied Quintaine as he rubbed the palm of his hand over the writing. As he brushed his over the writing, the cargo hold sprung open startling everyone. &#8220;What about the life sign?&#8221; said Trent. It appeared everyone had forgotten Trent&#8217;s scan in awe of the ship. &#8220;Take a look&#8221; said Omaelia looking at Trent. &#8220;Be careful&#8221; said Juni. Trent walked slowly over to the cargo hold and peered inside. Pushed up against the back wall was a rectangular object with what appeared to be a raised curved glass pane over the top. It had gathered a layer of dust. As Trent went to brush it away, he stopped. His mind had cast back to his first visit on board the Dom Kavash Mothership. His current situation had reminded him of what happened the last time he brushed dust of a container. &#8220;Trent&#8230;.Trent&#8230;.Hey Trent!&#8221; Shouted Juni as she placed her hand through the cargo hold and on to Trent&#8217;s shoulder instantly snapping him out of his daydream. &#8220;Huh, oh sorry&#8221; replied Trent. His hand was still hovering inches above the dust covered container. &#8220;Are you ok?&#8221; asked Omaelia. &#8220;Yeah, I&#8217;m fine, just a bit of deja vue that&#8217;s all&#8221; &#8220;Well what&#8217;s inside&#8221; she replied. Trent placed his hand firmly on the container and slowly brushed away the a small segment of the dust at the top of the container. His eyes opened wide and he slowly turned round to look at Omaelia and Juni, along with everyone else who had moved their way over to the hold. &#8220;Its human&#8230;..&#8221; Edited by - Bret Bretonian on 9/23/2004 2:44:54 PM
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