Nomad Takeover

    Nice Fanfic! Your Story has potential!!! Now I´ll give you a little constructive feedback (I hope). 1.) You are a little to fast with the Story: What you have written so far, would be a good Introduction into the story, but not 2 full chapters (in my opinion) 2.) Please describe the things more detaild: Time - How much time has past since the end of the game Equipment - Your story plays in the future, describe possible advancments and other things that have changed since the end of the game Ships - Describe the Nomad mothership and other ships that may be in the mod, but not in the original game Planets - If there are any new ones Battles - Brings more Atmosphere in the story Character - Bring in Characters and describe them (why do they do, what they do; where are they from; etc... That should be enough feedback for now. Keep it up and write more.

    WHAT?! ARE YOU SAYING MY STORY SUCKS?!?!?!? Heh just kiddin. Part 3 will be the best part. NOMAD INVASION OF THE BORDER WORLDS!!!! Coming whenever I get motivation! <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> EDIT: I´ll revise my 1st 2 parts w/ more detail --------------------------------------- If I had a dollar for every idiot on the Earth... <img src=´http://i6.photobucket.com/albu…hrisbossi/Allyourbase.jpg ´> Like anime? Go <A href=´http://www.db-unlimited.net/smf´ Target=_Blank>here</a> Edited by - Chrisbee on 8/22/2005 6:39:44 PM

    Motivation came quiclky <img src=smilies/icon_smile_big.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> (NOTE: This will give you an idea of Version 2 of my mod <img src=smilies/icon_smile_wink.gif width=15 height=15 border=0 align=middle> You can find info on V 1 in the MOD announcment Forum ------------------- PART 2 - NOMAD INVASION OF THE BORDER WORLDS The Corsairs and The Order have been able to keep a hold on Omicron Minor for a good amount of time now, about 9 months after &quot;the raid&quot;. Things, however, have been going from bad to worse. The Nomads went from sending small fighters, to sending Battleship and Fighter patrols, to sending massive portions of their fleet. With the Order nearly gone - a mear 9 pilots left, and the Corsairs starting to back ot of the deal, it seems as though hope is lost. It pretty much is. December 12th, it happened. The entire Nomad fleet, including the mothership, uncloaked at Toledo. The Corsairs and the Order knew that it was time to go. All remaining Order piltos borded the Osiris as it set out to find a new home. It made a new base in Omicron Gamma, in the Asteroid Belt near Tripoli Shipyard. The Nomads began flooding into the Border Worlds. One by one the bases fell, Malta, Cali, Crete, Tripoli Itself, The Hawaii, almost evertything gone. Leaving almost nothing behind. The Order and the Corsairs, the last factions in the Border Worlds, now must fight to keep all of Sirius from collpasing. Find out the solution on the next NOMAD TAKEOVERRRRRRR!!!!!! --------------------------------------- If I had a dollar for every idiot on the Earth... <img src=´http://i6.photobucket.com/albu…hrisbossi/Allyourbase.jpg ´> Like anime? Go <A href=´http://www.db-unlimited.net/smf´ Target=_Blank>here</a> Edited by - Chrisbee on 8/22/2005 6:54:21 PM